Fie Eoin Friday: Apollo’s New First Scene!

Apollo and Daphne, Gian Lorenzo Bernini.

Apollo and Daphne, Gian Lorenzo Bernini.

It’s been a couple weeks since we’ve had a Fie Eoin Friday on the blog, and since we saw Daphne’s POV last time, I thought today I’d give you Apollo’s POV. This is the new version of the first scene of Apollo and Daphne. Enjoy!

Apollo would never outrun the ghost of Hyacinth. She was in the photographs on his nightstand when he woke in the morning. In the smell of her shampoo that still lingered in his car. In the face of every dark-haired girl he caught a glimpse of. He would never escape the memory of what he’d done.

His feet pounded the ground as he ran. Sweat beaded on his forehead and ran down his nose, dropping to the damp leaves of the cross country course. He focused on his breath, on the rhythmic beating of his feet, on the red and gold jersey of his best friend, Hermes, who ran ahead of him. He focused on the heartbeat thundering in his chest.

Hyacinth’s heart had stopped by the time Apollo got to her.

A twig cracked under his foot, but instead he heard the dull crack of her head as the discus hit her temple. Saw the expression on her face as she fell. The doctors said she was dead before she hit the ground. Dead as she stared at him and fell.

Apollo growled and his feet picked up the rhythm of his new heartbeat. Angry, thundering. He was going to outrun his guilt today. Run faster than the ghost of Hyacinth.

“Too soon, man,” Hermes said between breaths as Apollo passed him.

Apollo ignored him and kept his pace. He wouldn’t tire today. He would burn up the hot regret running through his veins. Burn it up until there was nothing left and he was empty. As empty as Hyacinth’s eyes as she fell.

The sound of Hermes feet behind him changed, and soon he was inching up on Apollo. Hermes had always been the faster runner, ever since they were little, but today Apollo wanted to win. Today he would win.

Hermes matched his pace, breath harsher than before, and when he began to pull ahead near the end Apollo called up all of his guilt and shame and anger and ran, as fast as he could, and broke out of the trees ahead of his friend.

Apollo crossed the finish line a single step ahead.

April is a Bitch, and so is Daphne.

Bou's got the right idea. Sleep through April.

Bou’s got the right idea. Sleep through April.

Aledans, I’m sure if you’ve seen me around the internet at all this week you know April and I have nearly come to blows. If you haven’t seen me around the internet at all this week it’s because April and I have nearly come to blows. Let’s agree that April Fool’s Day should never fall on a Monday again. It’s just not fair (hear that calendar-makers? Act accordingly).

Camp NaNo started out a miserable failure, until I realized I was trying to do something completely unnecessary. Nameless needed so many complete re-writes that I assumed Apollo would too. I’ve read through it a number of times and Sandhya (ie. Adriana Ryan, who has unveiled herself to the world!) read through it, and you know what? I think it just needs a fairly big edit. I don’t think everything has to be scraped and re-written.

There are some really, really good parts already, and I learned a lot about writing before I wrote the first draft. In this draft I have to cut some scenes, tighten some others, punch up the tension, and make Daphne more sympathetic. That last one is the part I’m still having troubles with, but I started writing the scene where Daphne meets Apollo from her POV, and it’s helping me get into her head and figure out why she is the way she is. Because I know she comes across as a bit of a bitch. And he falls in love with her despite that.

In fact, since today is technically Fie Eoin Friday why don’t I give you a little taste? It’s not the full scene, and it’s not edited because it’s not actually going to be part of the book, but have some Daphne:

~~~~~

Senior Year. Daphne couldn’t wait to get out of the hell-hole that was Olympia High School and across the country to NYU. Assuming they accepted her, of course. Even if they didn’t she planned to jump ship and move as far away as possible. She was over the cliques, the constant supervision, and most of all the asshole boys.

Speaking of asshole boys, Homeroom was suddenly inundated with the King of the Douchebags—Eros Phanes. Daphne was really hoping she wouldn’t have to see his fat face this year.

“Far-shooter!” He yelled, but for once his taunting voice wasn’t directed at her. “Did you get lost on the way to school this morning, Shooter? You belong at Capital.”

A tall, handsome boy in the front row cringed. He had short, dark hair just beginning to curl at the ends like it needed to be cut, and clothes that were a little worn around the hems. Clean and pressed, but worn. Daphne was pretty sure he was on the cross country team with her and won last weekend’s match against Capital.

Whoever he was, he’d incurred Eros’ wrath, which automatically made him her ally.

“I’m not lost,” the boy said. “I transferred.” His voice was a nice, even baritone.

Eros sat in the desk next to him. “Finally got sick of those loser Cougars, huh? Decided to be a Bear?”

The boy ignored Eros, but his hands folded into fists as if he couldn’t wait to punch that chubby face. Daphne liked him already.

“So what’s with the move, Shooter?”

The boy’s whole body seemed to tense, and Daphne walked over—she was better prepared to deal with Eros than this new kid.

She dropped her books on Eros’ desk with a loud bang. “You’re in my seat.”

He looked up, surprised. “I don’t see your name on it.”

She leaned into his face and scowled. “Out. Now.”

His jaw set and he sneered, but stood. She stared at him as he moved a row back and sat behind the new kid. She jerked her head a tiny bit—a warning. Whoever this new kid was, woe be to Eros if he tried to hurt him. If Daphne could help it Eros wouldn’t hurt anyone ever again.

~~~~~

Of course Eros does hurt them both, again and again.

Have a good weekend, Aledans. And if you feel the need to throw down the gauntlet with April give me a call: I’ll be your backup.

Fie Eoin Friday: Apollo and Daphne

Apollo and Daphne, Gian Lorenzo Bernini

Apollo and Daphne, Gian Lorenzo Bernini

Happy Friday, Aledans! Or maybe I should start calling you Olympians, since that’s what my next novel is about?

I don’t really feel like talking about last week anymore than I already have on Twitter, so we skipped yesterday’s update. Instead I finally went out for Adult Milkshakes with Adriana Ryan (and have I told you how much I love her? Oh, I have? Let me tell you again. She’s awesome!) and with her help I finally overcame a huge roadblock to the re-write of Apollo. We’ve seen Poe a couple times before, in the Lucky Seven Meme and the Warm Fuzzies Blogfest. And to get into the spirit of re-writing Apollo I’m making today’s FEF all about my favorite boy.

Um, no, not Gar or Monk or Lane. They’re men ;)

~~~~~

The air around Apollo was thick with unspoken questions, and it was Artemis who addressed it first.

“Alright, let’s just lance this thing and clean up the mess. What did Eros tell you?”

“Nothing,” Athena said, looking relieved. “He left as soon as you did. I think he was afraid Apollo was going to come back and punch him.”

“I wish,” Daphne said. “It would have been worth it to watch someone shut him up.”

Apollo kept his eyes straight ahead, not able to look at anyone. He was glad that Artemis agreed to tell them about Hyacinth, because he couldn’t do it himself without crying.

“Ok.” Artemis took a deep breath. “Did you see the news report about the girl at Capitol who was hit with a discus last year?”

“Oh, ow,” Dion said without thinking. Everyone except Apollo turned and glared at him and he blushed. “Sorry.”

“Was she okay?” Daphne asked, although it was clear from her voice that she already knew the answer.

“It hit her in the temple – she died on impact.” Artemis squeezed Apollo’s hand. “Poe threw the discus. It was a complete accident – she shouldn’t have run onto the field until his turn was over.”

“That was the girl on the cross country team, right?” Nike asked. “The really fast petite one?”

Artemis nodded, and Nike reached over to pat Apollo’s shoulder. “Now I know why you freaked out when I asked about her. Sorry, man.”

“Did you know her?” Daphne asked.

“She was my girlfriend,” Apollo whispered and looked at the bleachers below them.

Lucky Seven WIP Lines: Apollo Style!

Hello Aledans! I was tagged by two people this week for the Lucky Seven meme that’s been going around for a while, and since last time I used seven lines from NAMELESS (and it was even from my favorite scene – score!) I thought this time I’d use seven lines from APOLLO AND DAPHNE, which I read through last week to get into editing mode.

In case you forgot, the rules are: Go to page 7 or 77 of your current manuscript. Scroll down to line 7. Then post the 7 lines following from there, exactly as they are!

Enjoy!

Apollo and Daphne, Gian Lorenzo Bernini

Apollo and Daphne, Gian Lorenzo Bernini

Daphne laughed. “No. I mean she’s not into guys. She likes girls, moron.”

“Oh.” Apollo blushed and looked at Athena once more. She didn’t look like his idea of a lesbian, but he supposed he probably didn’t look like her idea of a girlfriend killer. “Wait, does that mean that you and her-“

Daphne snorted. “Hardly. We’re practically sisters. But don’t be getting any romantic ideas about me, my friend. I don’t date.”

“You don’t date anyone?”

“Anyone. Male or female. I don’t have time for it, and for the most part high school boys are dickheads.”

~~~~~

I would link you to the lovely Aledans who tagged me, but both posts are hidden behind a Facebook friends-only tag.

But now I’m tagging all of you! Either reply in the comments or write your own post and link it here :)

Custom of the Week: Daphne and Apollo

I am super excited about this week’s custom-that’s-not-a-custom because it has to do with the book I just started editing: Apollo and Daphne! If you haven’t read the Apollo and Daphne myth, find the nearest copy of Ovid’s Metamorphoses and start reading – it’s one of my favorites. So much so that I wrote a contemporary YA re-telling of the myth, which you are going to hear a lot about this year as I try to get it ready to send out. Needless to say, when I came across the following artwork of Daphne turning into a tree as Apollo looks on, I knew I had to feature it on my blog. In fact, it’s becoming my computer wallpaper as well!

Daphne and Apollo, by Xanadove

I love the surprise on Daphne’s face. I’m sure she did not expect her plea for help to end up turning her into a tree!

 
If you have a pony that you would like featured as Custom of the Week, please email me: rebeccaenzor@gmail.com

Update #1

Time to try something new this week: I’m going to start keeping accountable to my fabulous readers by updating you on what I’m doing/have done for the week (not just writing-wise, but life-wise too). I have a feeling this year is going to be busy, so I’ll probably need someone to get the whip out if I want to get everything done.

And by busy, I mean awesome.

I have to admit, I’m having a pretty damn good year so far. January isn’t even over with and I’ve already started doing yoga twice a week, dropped some fat from my middle (my pants, which were starting to get tight a couple weeks ago, are now fitting normally again) and stopped drinking wine on the weekdays (I have a feeling this is more to do with the dropping fat than the yoga, since I’ve been doing yoga since September :P ).

I’ve read more books in the past two weeks than I did for the last two months of 2011.

I finished The Nameless Warrior (which took me all of last year to re-write… twice) and did my first read-through of Apollo to get ideas for what needs to happen there. I sent it to my First Readers for ideas and feedback, and wrote a list of all of Apollo’s goals for the novel. I’m still trying to figure out which is goal #1, which will then dictate what type of re-writing I need to do (the top three contenders are: “Get dad to notice me (in a positive way)”, “get a scholarship for school”, and “get over the fact that I accidentally killed my girlfriend”. The daddy-issues are definitely the longest, but the scholarship and dead girlfriend guilt are a bit more immediately pressing).

I also bought a new water heater. Yay for hot water!

On the agenda for the next week:

Continue with the yoga, not drinking, and having hot water.

Finish reading Crash Into You and Dies Irae.

Find someone who knows Olympia, Washington, as well as someone who is an expert in the Apollo myths (if you know anyone who qualifies for either please let me know, or point them my way!). Start building a chapter by chapter outline of the novel, and figure out what is the #1 goal in Apollo’s life. Storyline how his parents met, and how things progressed to having a bastard child that daddy wouldn’t claim.

I’d say that’s a pretty reasonable list for next week. Is there anything that you need to be held accountable for next week? I’ll get the whip out >:)

Playing Catch-up

Yesterday was supposed to be Fie Eoin Friday, but I must admit – I’m a little burnt out on what has become “The Nameless Warrior” right now. Critiques are trickling in – most of them good, although I do have a few week spots I still need to work on (someone called Kaye a harpy, and someone else said they were surprised she moved to [redacted] and suddenly forgot to wear panties :P Kindra’s getting straight A’s so far though!). I’ve started reading through Apollo to see what needs work there (pacing, tension, and I feel like he’s a bit of a wimp for an athletic high school boy), and I’m lining up some trusted First Readers for that project. Mostly though, I’m catching up on my TBR pile.

I finished Game of Thrones, read A Million Suns and Phoenix Feather, will be finishing The Near Witch this weekend, and will be reading Dies Irae this weekend as well (PS. Christine will be here on Feb 6th with a guest post on what inspired her new series!). I still have the rest of the Fire and Ice series, Delirium, The Silver Eagle (I won a hardcover of this book, and it’s been so long that the NEXT hardcover in the series has come out!), 11/22/63, Elemental Magic, Beautiful Creatures, The Clockwork Prince, Cornerstone, The Six Elements of Style, and Crash Into You that I can think of off the top of my head. Also a few little crit projects for some of the lovely people who read The Nameless Warrior for me.

That doesn’t even include Google Reader. I’m afraid to even look at the link to that, for fear it might burst into flames and consume me.

But it feels good to start coming back from Fie Eoin. I’ve been living there for so long it’s strange to come back to the real world again. Pulling my head out of the “editing zone” and reading for fun, or *gasp* playing WoW, feels like wasting time. I have to keep reminding myself that there is no deadline. I don’t have to constantly carry around my red pen and be on alert for weak sentences (btw, do you know how hard it is to find a weak sentence in A Million Suns? Do you? If you don’t you should go pick up a copy and grab a red pen. I dare you to mark a single page).

So I’m not quite back to the world of the living and blogging, but I’m catching up. Is there anything exciting in your life that I missed while I was gone?

Warm Fuzzies Blogfest #4

Eeep! It’s the last week of the Warm Fuzzies Blogfest! It’s been a fun month getting to know other authors and spreading the writing love around and I have to say a big Thank You to Juliana for hosting :) And for the last blogfest challenge she’s given us a very warm fuzzy: What is a scene that you are proud of? One that made you go “Yes! I can do this!”

Since most of the scenes I’m proud of in Fie Eoin are near the end and give away major plot points, I’m going to put up something from Apollo and Daphne. I haven’t really talked much about Apollo and Daphne on this blog, but I love this story (based on the Apollo and Daphne myth) and I LOVE these characters. I plan on working on Apollo once Fie Eoin is out on submission, and I cannot wait!

So, although the scene itself isn’t so warm and fuzzy, it is one that I’m proud of. I give you: Apollo and Daphne!

The bell rang for homeroom and everyone began to amble out to their first hour class. Eros had an evil look in his eye that Apollo didn’t like, but ignored him as they walked into the hall.

“That’s quite the face,” Eros said and Apollo kept walking. “Did Daphne kiss it for you? Make it all better this weekend? Or was she the one who beat the shit out of you?”

“I was in a car accident.” Apollo didn’t slow down. His next class was all the way on the other side of the building and he didn’t want to be late.

Eros didn’t let up though; it seemed he didn’t care if he was late to his next class, which was in the opposite direction. “So she dumped you for no good reason, huh? I know how that goes.”

Apollo stopped so quickly that Eros almost ran into him. He turned and scowled into Eros’ face. “No. She dumped you for a very good reason. She dumped you because you are a scumbag and a bastard of a human being.”

“Huh,” Eros grinned. “And here I heard that you were the bastard.”

It was something in the way he said it that Apollo knew Eros wasn’t talking about his behavior. He was talking about his father.

“You see,” Eros continued, the grin on his face growing at the same rate as the dread on Apollo’s. “I was making friends with the Niobe kids the other day. And they were telling me that there were two other students at Oly with an interesting parentage-“

Rage took over and Apollo shoved Eros into the lockers, holding him there as he tried to shrink back. Apollo’s arm came back to punch him in the face but someone grabbed his wrist and Apollo turned on them, teeth clenched and all of his anger in his eyes. It died inside him as Daphne flinched back and he dropped his arms, releasing Eros.

“Don’t hit him,” Daphne whispered.

“Give me one good reason not to.” It felt like a growl in his throat instead of words, he was so angry. Angry at Niobe’s kids for telling, angry at Eros for using it against him, angry at Daphne for stopping him.

“He’s already halfway down the hall,” she smiled briefly, then swallowed. She looked guilty, apologetic, and worried. “Eros isn’t worth it.”

“You were the one who told me to punch him next time.”

“Yeah, but not at the expense of everything. Are you trying to get kicked out of UW? Because NYU isn’t going to accept you if you’re suspended for fighting.” She tried to smile again before she looked down at her feet.

She was trying to joke about it? Right now, when she had dumped him as both a boyfriend and a friend just for being accepted at UW? Apollo made a disgusted noise in his throat and walked away. Now she wanted to reconcile? Now after everything that had happened? No thank you.

“Poe, wait.”

He walked faster.

“Apollo, stop.” She ran to catch up with him and grabbed his arm. He winced – it was still bruised there – and she let go quickly. “I want to talk to you.”

“Well, I’m sorry, but you had your chance. I don’t want to talk to you anymore.”

He turned again to leave but she stepped in front of him. He thought that was pretty brave since he had just slammed someone into a locker and tried to punch their face, but he supposed she knew he could never hit her. Even telling her that he didn’t want to talk took all the anger and courage that he could afford. When she stepped in his way his shoulders sagged and he closed his eyes.

“Poe, I really need to talk to you.”

“Did you know,” he said, his voice quiet so that no one else would hear him, “that when Hyacinth died I tried to kill myself? I took a bunch of pills and my mother had to rush me to the hospital and pump my stomach. Because it was so hard to deal with.” He opened his eyes and looked at her, “but it’s been even harder trying to deal with you dumping me. Because I’m still hurt from Hy’s death, and because I know that if she had the choice she would have stayed with me, but you? You dumped me, and fired me, and then told me that you wouldn’t even be my friend anymore. So maybe my car accident was less an accident than an attempt to get away from it all. Because it hurts. It hurts So. Fucking. Bad.”

Daphne was silent as she stared at him. He had shocked her into silence, and he preferred it that way. And while she was still in shock he stepped around her and continued on his way to class, stepped in just as the bell rang and sat down next to Cassie, who smiled at him.

Happy Autumn!

Autumn actually started on Friday, but it’s hard to tell that it started at all in Charleston. The trees are still green, the air is still muggy and hot, and everyone’s still wearing sundresses and sandals. I plan on going to the beach at least one more time before I put my bathing suits away (yes, I have more than one. I LIVE at the beach during summer!), and while I’ve had my first pumpkin latte of the year I had to get it as a frappuccino.

But I celebrated the equinox on Friday with a harvest feast and the one thing that really makes it feel like autumn to me: the scents of fall.

Mmmmm. You can smell that can’t you? The cinnamon broom whisking all of the negativity out of the house and hanging by the door so it smells delightful every time you open the door. The candle that smells like pumpkin pie, or apple cider, or clove. The oil burner with sandalwood and frankincense. Rosemary and thyme in the kitchen. And best of all? The smell of cooler weather sneaking in at night when the sun’s gone down just a little bit earlier than last night. Take in a deep breath, and let out a happy sigh.

When I start smelling those classic scents of autumn it makes me want to curl up next to the fireplace, notebook and pen in hand, and start writing. Get lost in the woods of Fie Eoin as the leaves change color. Sit on the shore of Loch Ness and pet a kelpie. Go to a football game and snuggle in close with Apollo. Take Mikayla for a horseback ride by the river. Jump off a cliff with Neona.

What’s your favorite scent of fall? Where does it take you when you smell it?

NaNo Prep

Back when I was a practicing Wiccan (it didn’t stick, I really sucked at being a witch. I really suck at being anything with a set practice of rituals) I read in a book on Wiccan rituals that the circle started well before calling the corners and lighting the candles. It started when you got into the mind set. It started in the preparations. And it’s the same way for NaNo. Wrimos love November because they finally get to start writing, but I love October. I love the preparation and the anticipation. I love getting in the mind set of writing like a maniac.

One of my Wiccan friends told me that she uses a certain CD to get in the mind set for a ritual. Her ritual starts when she turns on the CD and begins to prepare for the circle. And her brain is now hard-wired to get into that mind set whenever she hears those songs, even if it’s the middle of a random Tuesday. So I tried that, and it worked. To this day when I hear the Prologue to “The Book of Secrets”, by Loreena McKennit, I am immediately put in the frame of mind of the ritual. And I can do the same for my writing. “The Mystic’s Dream” or “All Souls Night” (also Loreena McKennit) puts me right into Fie Eoin, wherever I am. Most of Loreena’s songs put me in Fie Eoin. Mat Kearney conjures up Apollo and his crew. “Come Alive” by the Foo Fighters makes me think of Holly and the Manticore, or Karigan and Bar depending on my mood. Many Dave Matthews songs make me think of Rebecca and Lane. And “What I Wouldn’t Do” by A Fine Frenzy or “St Stephen’s Cross” by Vienna Teng makes me think of Neona and Book of Souls.

It’s a convenient little trick, using music to put you in the right frame of mind. When I want to work on Fie Eoin – no matter what I’m doing – I can turn on the playlist and I’m there, ready to listen to Kindra and Kaye. And when I’m planning Book of Souls this month and writing it next month I’ll play A Fine Frenzy, Vienna Teng, and the Avatar soundtrack (I happened to be storylining BoS when I first listened to the soundtrack, so instead of reminding me of the movie it now puts me straight into Neona’s world. Unfortunately the CD doesn’t work in my car or on my work computer :/).

What about you? Do you have any rituals to prepare and get yourself in the writing mind frame? Are there any albums or songs that remind you of your characters and your worlds?

Don’t forget to visit the other Wrimos in the blogchain and find out how they prepare for NaNoWriMo!

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