Getting to Know You: Big Cities

Vacation is nearly here, but before we take the trip to Key West we’re popping into Chicago for a St Vincent concert. It used to be a four hour drive when I lived in Michigan, so day trips to Chicago weren’t a huge deal. One time in college some friends and I woke up and got on the road at 4am, made it downtown by the time the museums opened, and spent the day visiting with Sue the T-Rex and the Shedd dolphins before we drove back home late at night. Hubs and I had our first together trip there back in college as well (we also went to Shedd Aquarium – it’s my favorite aquarium and I’ve probably been there more times than some of the people who live in Chicago :P ).

Of the big cities that I’ve visited (which is a rather pathetic five: Detroit, Chicago, DC, Atlanta and Portland) Chicago is my favorite. I love that you can walk from Navy Pier all the way to the Aquarium along Lake Michigan without anything to impede your view. I love the Sears Tower (it will always be the Sears Tower to me). I love the food, and the wind, and that it doesn’t get ungodly hot in the summer.

So tell me, what’s your favorite big city?

Fie Eoin Friday: Pike’s Revenge

Today I have a really stinking long cut scene for you. I wrote the original Pike’s Revenge a few years ago, before all the changes in NAMELESS made the second book require a completely new storyline. Barracuda is no longer a character at all (I did give Karigan’s son the warrior name Barracuda in Book Three to make up for it), but in this little snippet he’s Pike’s son, returned to Fie Eoin without knowing what a bad guy his father was. He’s brought a bit of a plague with him, and Karigan is on a mission to find a cure.

Again, I used to be a head-hopper. I apologize :) Enjoy!

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Karigan and Bar decided not to go any further for the day despite the hours of daylight left, and set up camp early.  They could use the rest, they both decided – there was no point in trying to kill themselves finding a cure.  So they made a fire and caught some fish and ate an early dinner, smoking the extra fish to take with them.  Bar was fashioning implements out of the squirrel bones while Karigan cleaned her spear, marveling at how little used it appeared, although she’d used it every day since they started on their journey, half a moon ago.

“Is that the spear you brought back from Gaerlom?” Bar asked, and she nodded.  “What makes it so much better than the others?”

Karigan shrugged.  “It’s stronger, able to withstand the elements better, and it’s lighter for throwing.”  She turned it in her hand, admiring the smooth wood, the sharp blade.  “It’s much more accurate.”

“Have you ever killed anyone?”  It sounded like a stupid question to be asking a girl younger than he was, but she was training to be a warrior so she must know how to kill someone, even if she hadn’t used that knowledge yet.

“No.”  She looked neither pleased nor disappointed by her answer.  It was what it was.  “There have been no battles since I started training; and my parents promised to hold Sipi and I back if we ever went to a battle before receiving our marks.”

“What’s a mark?”

Karigan thought someone would have explained the warriors and their marks to him by now.  She was constantly surprised by what he didn’t know.  “It’s the scars on the warrior’s backs.  It gives them their warrior name.”

“They just look like scars to me.”  Bar shrugged.  He had tried hard to picture the namesakes of the warriors in the webbing of scars on their backs but so far had been unsuccessful.  “Are they battle scars?  How do they get them?”

“It’s ceremonial,” she explained, moving forward in her excitement to talk about the ceremony that for her was only two summers away.  “They send all of the trainees who have made eighteen summers out to catch food for the feast, and if you don’t come back with at least one deer you are a failure.  Usually if a trainee can’t catch something big he just won’t come back at all.”

“What happens if he does come back with nothing?”

“He’s shamed for life.”  She said it so casually, as if it was not a huge deal for someone to be shamed in their village for the rest of their life.  His mother had been driven out of her tribe for shame, and Karigan gave it no more than a glance on the life of the tribe.  “He’s stripped of his weapons and sent to another tribe.  He probably won’t marry, because no one wants a failed trainee.  Like I said, most just don’t return.”

Bar nodded in understanding at that; it was hard to find respect in the tribe of Fie Eoin if you weren’t a warrior.  He already knew that.  “So you hunt.  Then what?”

“Then you go to sweat for the night, and try to see visions of your future accomplishments as a warrior.”

“You can see what you will do?” Bar asked in awe.

Karigan shrugged.  “I don’t know if anyone actually sees anything.  My mother saw our ancestor, Ian Odion, when he took over Fie Eoin by force…” She trailed off and grew silent, it was the first time she had mentioned her mother on the trip.

“I’m sorry, Karigan,” Bar said softly, knowing the fresh pain of losing a mother.  The pain of being fine one moment until you tripped over a memory, and then growing cold and silent at the realization that there would be no more.

Karigan brushed his concern off and continued on as if it hadn’t happened, although her voice was rough with held in emotion.  “After sweat you are brought out to the whipping rock, which is exactly what it sounds like.  They whip each trainee, giving them their mark, and at the feast later that night they examine the mark and name them.  It’s my favorite feast of the year.”

It sounded violent to Bar, but he didn’t mention that.  “What if they can’t see a name?”

“Sometimes they can’t, and they hold a second ceremony later, after a battle wound completes the mark.  That’s what happened to my mom.”  Karigan fought off her desire to stop talking about her mother and continued in as normal a voice as possible.  “They couldn’t see a name in her mark at first, and had to wait until her mark was completed in battle.  They held a ceremony just for her so she could be named in front of everyone.”

“Completed in battle? Was it-“

“Yes.”  Karigan knew who he was talking about and didn’t make him finish; it was a small kindness he appreciated. It was good to know some things, for the sake of understanding where he came from, but he wasn’t interested in the details.

“So you can look at the mark and know the name of the warrior?”

“Of course,” Karigan gave him a funny look, “don’t you know the names of all the people you meet?”

“Well, yes.”

“And how do you recognize them?”

“By their face, or their hair, and sometimes their clothing.”

“And in Fie Eoin you recognize them by their mark.  Each mark looks different.”  Karigan picked up a twig and moved closer to Bar, sweeping the leaves from the ground before them.  She began a series of lines in the dirt that she had been memorizing from birth.  “Can you see it?” she asked as she finished and looked at him.

Bar studied it for a moment, seeing only the lines in the dirt.  “No,” he said, shaking his head and frowning.  “Who is it?”

Karigan outlined the grouping with her stick; it was a long, thin fish.  “It’s my dad’s mark.”

Bar looked at her, studying the sudden softness of her features at the mention of her father, debating with himself whether he should ask her to turn around and go home now.  He looked down at the mark and saw the fish now that she had outlined it, but Karigan took her palm and wiped the lines away into the dirt.

“A warrior’s mark is powerful,” she said in a hushed voice, “we do not leave it lying out for anyone to find.”  But she picked up her stick and drew another mark, similar to the first.  She had never seen the actual mark on the man, but she had seen her father draw it many times, in his own personal ceremonies that her mother had not known about.  When she finished she got up to let him study it and moved back to where she had been seated with her spear.  She drew another mark in the ground, one that Bar vaguely recognized, and continued cleaning the spear off above it.

Barracuda turned back to the mark in the dirt before him and studied it, trying to find the name.  It looked, to him, almost exactly like the one she had drawn before, but he suspected it was just his inability to see the lines for something else.  As the firelight flickered over the lines in the dirt, however, he saw a flash of scales, a flick of tail, and although he knew it was just his imagination he also knew the name in the mark.  Bar put his hand out over the lines, afraid to ruin it with his touch, and then looked at his cousin with gratitude.  She had given him a great gift, this mark, and he would memorize each line until he could see it with his eyes closed.

“Thank you, Karigan,” he whispered, but she pretended not to hear.

Update #13: I finished storylining!

I thought you would all be very happy to know that not only is the fence finished (and I LOVE it) but I finished storylining Book Three! I was quite surprised at the ending (and at the deaths of some favorite characters), but it’s a good ending and really ties everything together nicely. It also pays homage to the characters we’ve lost over the course of the series, and even ends with Kaye (who may or may not be the only character from NAMELESS to make it all the way to the end).

And the new world – the Queen’s world – has been so much fun to play in! The majority of the book wasn’t even set in Fie Eoin, but in the Kingdom (that doesn’t have a name yet) based on the Roman Empire (but with Greek city-state like mini-Kingdoms, and Greek sounding names). There are language barriers and technology barriers and culture barriers and it was so much fun to storyline. And the best part is, once I get back from Key West I can start writing! Books Two, Three, and Sipi’s novela, all in one fell swoop. This summer will be like the ultimate NaNo! (I just have to get excited about Book Two again :P )

I’m still waiting on the edits to come back, which sucks because I wanted to have NAMELESS edited and off on submission before I left for Key West. Thus is life, I guess. Either way I’m going to relax on the beach with margaritta in hand ;)

And just a little public service announcement: I’m stopping Custom of the Week for the summer, while I focus on writing everything. But I’ve already got ponies lined up for the return after I’ve managed to bang out three first drafts :) I realize this means my readership is going to drop off to almost nothing, but Fie Eoin Friday should come back as a regular feature again. And maybe the sticky notes! I’ve already stockpiled a bunch for the rest of the series ;)

Have an awesome rest of May, all! I’m going to be kind of missing for the rest of the month :)

Getting to Know You: WIP Lines

I was going to put this up last Friday for FEF, but then I caught the zombie flu that’s been going around the lab and took Friday off to bake the virus out of me in the sun (yay for the new fence!). Plus, it felt like I was posting a lot last week, and no one needs to listen to me talk about myself that much.

I was tagged by Shen Hart of Ink Stained Pawprints last week with the Lucky Seven meme that’s been going around. The rules are: Go to page 7 or 77 of your current manuscript. Scroll down to line 7. Then post the 7 lines following from there, exactly as they are!

I cheated a bit because page seven is all Warrior’s Ceremony setting and page 77 is just Gar complaining to his mother that Pike and Kindra don’t get along. So I flipped to page 177, found line seven, and was pleasantly surprised to realize it’s my favorite scene in the entire novel. How could I not use it? And I think it’s pretty self-explanatory, so please enjoy!

“I follow Ian Odion and his descendants. Kindra should get the horse.”

Cougar stepped forward, hand in the air, and then Al. Inu, Ocelot, and Gull followed. Goosebumps rose on Kindra’s skin as wrist after wrist shot up around her and she began to feel the full gravity of what was happening. It wasn’t about the horse at all. It was a rebellion. The warriors of Fie Eoin were choosing her over their chief. Spitting in Oak’s face with a forbidden mark.

Gar stepped forward, holding his wrist at eye-level so she couldn’t look away. When he spoke his voice was soft, meant only for her. “I follow Kindra Odion, the last warrior of Ian’s line. To the ends of Aleda. Forever.”

 

Now it’s your turn: what are your Lucky Seven WIP Lines?

Update #12

Man, how is it already Thursday? Not that I’m complaining about it being Friday Eve, but wow the weeks have been flying by lately.

Hubs and I spent the weekend gardening again, although this time instead of planting we were ripping out bushes and hacking back monster azaleas in preparation for the fence! They started building it on Tuesday, and it should be finished by the time I get home tonight from work :) It looks awesome so far, and is going to be so nice for the dogs (and for us!).

I haven’t received my edits yet, but I know they are on their way soon. I’ve been finishing up the last scene I need to add to THE NAMELESS WARRIOR and trying to storyline Bar’s half of Book Three. Bar’s half is not nearly as exciting as Hem’s half, so I think the book is going to be very Hemlock heavy. Maybe even two Hemlock chapters to every one of Bar’s (NAMELESS is one Kindra chapter to one Kaye chapter). Of course with Karigan, Kaye, Sipi and Shrike as POV characters in Bar’s half of the book it may equal out. Still, they are all kind of in a holding pattern until Hemlock returns. And I’ve finally reached that part of the book for storylining <3

On to the battles! Bloodshed! Death and Destruction! I found out yesterday that someone I wasn’t expecting to will die in the battles against the King, and I still have no idea which side wins. I’ll just have to keep storylining to find out. Plus this new bad guy just showed up this week, and I know he’s going to play a part in some of the battles, but I’m not sure how big or what he will do.

This is my favorite part of writing ^_^

And if you missed Tuesday’s post about Beach Books, I’m still looking for good books to take to Key West with me. If you have a favorite Beach Book let me know!

Getting to Know You: Beach Books

The Wind Through the Keyhole, Dark Tower #4.5 by Stephen King

I went to Barnes and Noble at lunch today to pick up the newest Dark Tower book (I have missed you Midworld!) and started browsing shelves for good books to take on vacation with me next month. I refuse to take my Nook or hardcovers to the beach (which means no reading most of my TBR pile), so today’s Getting to Know You question is this:

What is your favorite beach book?

I’m talking your favorite paperback that’s dog-eared, water stained, sand between the pages, beat up! Last summer I read To Have and Have Not by Ernest Hemingway (because how can you go to Key West and not read it?), Daughters of Rome by Kate Quinn, and The Other Queen by Philippa Gregory.

Why yes, I do have a thing for historical fiction on the beach ;)

So what about you? What was your last beach read, and what is your all-time favorite vacation book?

Custom of the Week: Serendipity

I apologize for not putting this up last week like I was supposed to, but like I said in the Update: that week was crazy full of ponies and I was gardening all day Sunday. I gardened all day yesterday too (by “gardened” I mean “pulled out bushes so we can put the new fence in”). We’ve definitely come to that time of the year when the customs will be going up on Mondays for a while :)

And today’s custom makes me think of the beach with that cute flipper tail! Everything makes me think of the beach right now ;)

Serendipity, the Little Pink Dragon, by Okiegurl

I love the spines and the tail! How fun :) And if you recognize the name of the customizer it’s because she’s already been featured for Rainbow Brite!

If you have a pony that you would like featured as a Custom of the Week, please email me: rebeccaenzor@gmail.com

Fie Eoin Friday: Book Three

So I was talking in yesterday’s Update about Book Three, and how I’m trying to fix the issues in it before I start writing the first draft. And we all know how much I love sticky notes, so when I get a particularly good bit of dialogue I’ll jot it down on a sticky. That happened this past weekend, but then I hit the block (writer’s block!) and had to go back to before the bit I jotted down and start over. Which means I have a cut scene from Book Three already!

It’s actually not a complete scene, since it starts somewhere in the middle of a conversation between Hemlock and the Queen, but I liked it and I have no place for it any longer. Perfect FEF material!

So please enjoy the first FEF from Book Three (there is also another little scrap of dialogue from Book Three on my Facebook or Google+ pages):

“So you have trained your people to fear everyone. And now that they do you can tame their fears and become their only hope of salvation.” Hemlock shook his head as the carriage bumped along the dirt road. “And what if you find someone you cannot tame? What if your people lose hope?”

“They won’t. I will never find someone I cannot tame, because everyone fears me.”

He stared into her dark eyes. “I don’t fear you.”

The Queen studied her painted fingernails as if that didn’t matter. “Not for your sake. But for the family you’ve left behind, who have no chance against my army? Or for the priestess you kissed before we set out this morning?” She smiled slowly at him. “Ah, there’s the fear.”

Hem sat back, wiping his face of any emotion. The priestess warned him that there were spies everywhere, but he’d kissed her anyways, thinking no one could possibly find out. “I did not know about your rules.”

“You did.” The Queen turned back to studying her nails. “But as long as you behave I will spare her. Just remember that she is coming with us, and I can speak her death at any point along the road. We are not the only city with a tomb, and even dirt will do to bury a priestess alive on the road.”

Hem turned and looked silently out the window for the rest of the day.

Update #11

And the pony take-over of the blog has been beaten back into submission! I didn’t post this week’s Custom because even I was a little sick of the ponies. Also because I spent all day Sunday gardening. After three years our Mexican Heather finally died, so I spent the day ripping out the dead Heather and replacing it with Primrose (this is funny because my little sister’s name is Heather, and we all should know the famous little sister named Prim by now). The Primrose has taken pretty well already to the garden bed, and I planted some tiny red flowers in the front bed to give it a little color (right now it’s all green – my bulbs have bloomed and gone and the wildflowers haven’t yet bloomed).

I also gossiped with my neighbor about my other neighbors and got myself a mild sunburn. I used the magic sunburn relief spray from Key West and it’s turned into a little tan already. Which turns my mind towards Key West, where I will be hanging out on the beach with margarita in hand soon!

My plan is to (hopefully) get the edits on THE NAMELESS WARRIOR back tomorrow, spend next week fixing the things that need fixing and adding a couple scenes I’ve written since sending it off, and then write the synopsis. I’ll send out the first batch of queries right before I head to Key West so that I’m not sitting at home biting my nails over rejections. Instead I’ll be laying on a beach, drinking a margarita, not worrying about rejections ;) Which means I’ll have a super fun inbox to return home to.

I’m also trying to finish storylining Book Three before we leave for Key West, because there is no writing allowed on vacation! I’ve almost finished storylining Hemlock’s half of the book (which will probably take up more than half of the book, oops) and I’ll start on Barracuda’s half soon. I’m already completely in love with Book Three and the relationship between Hemlock and the queen. They fight like Rebecca and Lane, and if you’ve been around for a while you know I love a good Rebecca/Lane fight. I might even love Book Three more than NAMELESS (don’t tell Kindra). I definitely love it more than PIKE’S REVENGE (don’t tell Karigan). In FE and PR I follow the stronger twin through most of the storyline (Kindra and Karigan) but in Book Three I’m following the “weaker” twin around for the most part. Hem’s strong in his own way, of course, but everyone would consider Bar the stronger twin. Plus it’s totally fun to write a man’s POV as the main character! He’s a lot like his grandpa Gar :)

Of course now I have to do a few minor edits on NAMELESS to make them match one of the plotlines for Book Three (which really needs a name, but The Known World is already the name of a book and I can’t think of anything else right now). And that’s why I decided to storyline Book Three before trying to write the first draft of Pike’s Revenge. I knew it would change things. So now when I finish storylining everything I can write PR, Sipi’s Novella, AND Book Three all at the same time! I’m probably going to die of FE overdose this summer ;)

But what a way to go.

Customizing a Pony, Part 1

 

Fluttershy, the bait pony for this operation.

 I apologize right now to those of you who aren’t as into the pony posts as I am: this post is really going to suck for you. I ran PonyFest11 last year and offered the winner a custom pony of their character, and Amanda won with Tomohiro. Since Kalavista doesn’t dye ponies and I’ve had some experience with it I told her I would dye the bait and send it on to be finished by her. Easy, right?

Wrong. Oh so wrong.

Do you see the horrible nub? How annoying.

G4′s (“Generation 4″ – that’s what the pony community calls the newest line of giant-headed mutant ponies in stores today) are tough little suckers. The original line of ponies had heads that just popped off with little more than a tug, but these babies require exacto knives. Guess who doesn’t own an exacto knife (and was doing this with wine)? Me. But I do have push-pins! They’re sharp! Her head came off fairly easy and I ripped her mane out with tweezers.  But there’s this funky little nubby thing on the inside of her neck so her head can turn, and that was glued solidly to her body. So I stabbed Fluttershy in the neck repeatedly until I could remove that nub to get her tail out (the nub is still intact and Tomo will be able to move his head).

Dyeing the pony, take one.

That took hours, so you know. I was planning to do it all in one night, but it took me so long just to behead and shave the pony that I decided to wait until the next night to actually dye it. I had a bottle of RIT dye in dark brown, a glass measuring bowl, and a pair of stainless steel tongs (plus some gloves from work that I didn’t end up needing except when I rinsed the pony off). I put the whole bottle of dye in the bowl with boiling water from the tea kettle and held the pony down until the bubbles stopped coming out of her neck.

That sounds so gruesome, doesn’t it?

I left her in that dye until it was cold, and guess what she looked like? Dark Yellow.

Dyeing the pony, take two.

So I quickly got online and did a quick search for dyeing G4′s (you think I would have done this beforehand, but I’ve dyed G1′s before and they turned out fine). Someone said that Fluttershy is a particularly difficult pony to dye for some reason, but that cooking her would work. So I dumped the now-cold dye into a pan and turned on the stove.

Half an hour later, after I repeatedly checked her color and a good centimeter of dye had evaporated from the pot, I finally gave up. Fluttershy was orange. A really pretty Applejack orange. She would have made an awesome pegasus version of Applejack, in fact, and I would love to see someone make a custom of that. But she wasn’t Tomo brown.

Orange. Damn.

Well that’s it then, she’s going to need a full body repaint. How annoying. Repaints are fine if they are done well, but dyeing just makes the pony look cleaner. Still, I’m not buying another bottle of dye and cooking her for however long she needs to become the right color (plus there was a little section under her wing that didn’t dye at all).

Luckily for Tomo, I actually enjoy painting ponies. Much more than dyeing them, to be sure. And I have plenty of paints and brushes left over from my short-lived pony painting days.

First layer of paint. Why yes that is a chinese take-out menu underneath.

It took a little while to dig out all my supplies, but I finally painted Tomo last week. I was a little concerned at first, because the first layer of paint went on a bit messy around the wings (wings are hard to paint evenly!) and the eyes were clearly visible. But I mixed up a bunch of paint for the second layer to make sure I would have enough, and started again.

The second layer went on much smoother so I was able to even out the color, and once Tomo was dry I did a final layer just to make sure the brush strokes weren’t too visible. I’m afraid he dried slightly darker than I thought he would, but overall I think he looks fantastic!

Do you agree?

Tomohiro fully painted and ready to ship to Kal!

He should be arriving in the mail today, and Kal promised to take photos so I can put up a second picture-heavy post about the amazing job she’s going to do with the actual artistic part of him! Definitely be on the lookout for that. 

You can also help Kal buy supplies by ordering a copy of her book. Or you can find the human version of Tomohiro in Amanda’s book, coming out later this year!

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