So two weeks ago I had a writing group meeting, and one of the girls who came to the meeting had a really old chapter of Fie Eoin to give back to me. We’re talking, Chapter Two. And while not much has changed from the Chapter Two that I gave her to the present Chapter Two, one of her questions really threw me for a loop. You see, the Obsidians attack Fie Eoin in Chapter Two – it’s been that way from the very start of the book several years ago. And her simple question was: why?
I couldn’t really answer that question.
I thought I had an answer, but really thinking on it made me realize that my answer is pretty darn loose. And that got me to thinking about other parts of the book that weren’t as tight as they could be. Like the part where Pike attacks Fie Eoin with a band of Nomads. There is no way that the Nomads would win as the book is written, because there just aren’t enough of them and they aren’t highly trained warriors like those of Fie Eoin. So there needs to be something else, and since this current re-write has Kindra spitting in the face of the Obsidian Chief his men might just be persuaded to come along and teach her a lesson. It’s just too bad she’s so darn thick-headed. She doesn’t learn her lessons very well.